I once sent a poem to be reviewed. It got slated, mainly because the "critics" totally missed all the relevent points.
All they seemed bothered about was that in their opinion I was forcing the rhymes. I pointed out that as we don't normally
speak in rhyme of course they have to be forced and it reminded me of a song from a while back. The writer concocted the word
"knowed" specifically so it would rhyme with "road". Nothing wrong with that. I wonder if any of my idiot critics thought
to contact Bob Dylan (knowed and road was from "Don't Think Twice It's Alright") and tell him he was forcing rhymes.
And that's my point -- Do what YOU want not what they want.
Below is an example of what I like to write some of the time. It's not exactly the height of lyrical poetry but I think
it make a point.
We live in fear of everything:
What will tomorrow morning bring?
A mugging, rape or kill for thrill?
Or just the damned electric bill.
But just who is accountable
For the endless daily human cull?
So many contenders: To start where?
As we read the rags and pull our hair.
So let’s sit back and take a vote
On who’ll most likely sink our boat.
Not a very pleasant thought
But a lesson that should well be taught.
Forty percent say Uncle Sam
Who learned not from Korea or Nam.
It huffs and puffs and bears its chest
With disregard for all the rest.
Forty percent say a jihad
A popular Century Two One fad.
Although it’s meaning has new explanation
From Muhammad’s original interpretation.
Ten percent think we’ll step in pooh
Copied by descendants of Shang and Zhou.
When threats are made is it they who shout?
No, they just want to buy us out.
Ten percent in tin foil hats
Think Area 51’s where it’s at.
They see invasion from the stars.
Impossible, they live too far.
So from where will come annihilation?
Could anything cause mass obliteration?
There is a contender quite able to fire us
In the lightest weight class– the common virus.
Every winter there’s some new bug
Immune to every type of drug.
Slightly worse than the one last year:
“But I’ll get over it, have no fear.”
Our inner systems work overtime
To rid our bodies of microscopic grime.
But sooner or later we’ll lose the fight
And yet we do not see the plight.
Most folk hide behind a wall
Of trusted Paracetomol.
Three days in bed you’re as right as rain
And ready to start work again.
But one day all the warring schisms
Will fall to microorganisms
No ears for rebuke, too small to nuke
Is it Grand Design: Or just a fluke?